It's Poetry Darlings

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I haven't read much Byron, I'll read some, since you recommend :)

Lot's of his political stuff is really good (An Ode to the Framers of the Frame Bill) if you're at all political. But for pure emotion, When We Two Parted.
 
My bloody awful 'poetry'

I'm gonna put these out there. I may regret it and become embarrassed and then delete them, but oh well. They're somewhere between lyrics and poetry really- indeed, if I could sing well, play an instrument or come up with vocal melodies they probably would be songs due to the structure. Be gentle. :o

I won't deny the Morrissey influence (in terms of theme) in this one:

An Occasional Irritant
Paintings on the wall of the stark bright kitchenette
Remind me of my home again.
Youthful cries shrill enough to wake the dead
Tear through my ears; they bend
My sense of normality.
But still

I’m happy being solitary.
What’s mine is mine
And shyness is just a diversion
An occasional irritant and sting
Which adds to my subversion.

Things are not always what they seem-
Whilst you clatter and chatter
And feel sorry for me
My bed sheets and books sigh softly and say:
“Come home to us”
And gladly I go…

I’m happy being solitary.
What’s mine is mine.

Company’s a comfort
When it’s wanted
And the right people lift
A day from the gutter.
But the constant clutter
Of hands and feet
Wears you down eventually-
Don’t you find?

So I’m happy being solitary.
What’s mine is mine
My shyness is just a diversion
An occasional irritant and sting
It adds to my subversion
Just adds to my subversion
Oh, the insurrection!
Oh, the blasphemation! (Note: I know this isn't a real word :p)

Now I’m off.

Footnote
That last rhyme was just another footnote
To another life in strife.
It could be yours, it could be mine
But there’s so much din in minds
And sounds
That we don’t know what it is we’ve found.
Maybe it’s just an interlude to all the drivel
But what it isn’t is what they always said-
Any sort of waving drowning snivel
Chanting from the void
Wailing like the dead.

I also came up with a 'snippet' for a new one the other day, but I'm trying to germinate some other ideas for the rest of it...

Tedium is like Damocles’ sword
Over my head
About to descend.

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It's crap, I know, but I just posted it on a whim because, well, I'm bored (as you can probably tell from those last three lines). :)
 
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I'm quietly confident that I am going to reclaim British poetry from the pine tables of middle-class housewives: My heroes and influences are Morrissey and Marr, of course, but poetrically,

Ginsberg, Bukowski, Rimbuad, Philip Larkin, John Betjeman, Mayakovsky, Voznesenksy, Primo Levi, Roger McGough

Here are a few of my works:


I Am Just A Man

For McGough, Farley and Andrew Dean

As lonely and stark as a Lowry matchstick man,
I must look stupid against the silversmith’s sky
Which saps birdshit from the prideful sandstone angles,
And which turns the stained glass into holy neon
As it bleeds reds and blues to their rightful richness.

The hulk cathedral competes with cranes building up
To clouds crowning this shiny Atlantic city
As top of the morning blings off Paddy’s Wigwam,
And the Mersey breeze sings sailors’ boasts of a
Girl in every port, and two in Liverpool.

I feel like God today, privileged to roam
In a Man U shirt in the heartbeat of Scouseland.
Boddy’s in my veins, this morning’s hangover has
Soared me to as high as the cocky Liver birds
Who smirk across the broad Mersey to Birkenhead.

I nod to Prescot peacocks with Cricket dresses;
And watch gulls jostle for space on the Three Graces;
I can hear the Anfield roar rouse Stanley Park;
And with a bronze Billy Fury, see ferries dock
Their tourists and cargoes like they have always done.

And her lasses and las flash grins and Japanese
Tourists pose in the bulb flashes by the Cavern;
I’m dwarfed by dishes and arches in Chinatown;
As culture vultures gorge within Saint Georges Hall,
When WAGS browse wall-to-wall in the gleaming L1.

Liverpool is a pert ageless nymph of all life
Stopped growing further still by the sea-bound buffer
Which opened her to America and wide worlds:
The glitziest trading post; Britannic cradle -
Artisan pout and New York chic with a Scouse wink.

And she is, forever, for I am just a man,
A mortal man -
I am just a Mancunian.
----

Home

I am in love. I am in love.
Reading Keats by the bleak Irwell
Wondering about the people
Who broke the waters of my life.
I am in love, I am in love.

I’m walking back down the towpath
Which divides Manchester estates
From Salford estates thinking
Is happiness equality?
And if yeah, what keeps lives apart?

Such a immense thing was never
Emptier.
Just wait til I leave;
Can express real emotion
Without drugs pulling me down;
Or medicinal alcohol
In the half-glass (yet never straight)

A bedsit crammed in a suitcase,
Amber lights no longer blind me,
And its concrete ties don’t bind me,
I am the angel of the North,
So keep safe my Icarus heart.

It’s you I will not leave behind
------

The Manchester Renaissance

Proper Mancs say: "Shut your north and south!"
divided only by shirt colour
come derby day.

My Manchester,
built by buildings as big as its heart;
today we’re changing for the better.

We’re not so soft as the cotton made here
cos we’ve had it mint and we’ve had it hard.
We’ve stood back and watched our mills fall quiet -
that was a revolution in ruin.
A government got its turn with Thatcher.
Eighties’ kids laboured on to gleefully
stick two fingers up at her in the Hac
while they were ‘avin it on pure acid
and mesmerised by ‘A Guy Called Gerald.’

Lots of cash and drugs have been injected
into Manchester - that’s the way we do it -
and today we are changing for the best.
On our Pennine throne, we are king
and over the northern realm may we reign

til’ those fibreglass cows come home.
May we be top, sweet, sorted, sound
til’ that endless rain stops falling,
when Leeds is bigger, Liverpool louder,
when London finally stops calling.

Shout out to Oasis, the Smiths,
Edwards, Bell, Lowry and Turing.
Anyone who's who: north or south,
red or the blue, the born and bred
and diehards, to the through and through,
and don't forget the adopted few.

To the city that just dozes
in the dense concrete jungle.
A pulsating throb of vibrancy
pounding the labyrinth street.
All resounds and all is colour,
as I view the kaliedescope
of cultures, the fusion of creeds
in the simmering crucible
always toiling, always bubbling.

Pigeons and gothic gargoyles,
and me watch the sun run away,
and my Manchester, yours and ours,
settles under the brewing sky.
And, like applause, the rain slowly
falls down as a crescendo,
harder, faster, as to encore
such a symbol, such a gift.

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One from the Heart.

Oh lady Di, Oh Lady Di
Why did you have to



Die ?



Oh Dodi Dodi Dodi too



...they do dat don't dey, don't dey doo??
 
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Brilliant.

You guys are all brilliant... Keep them coming... :)

This one is about five years old, but I'll post it anyway. It has no title...

The years are travelling past without my having any purchase
upon them
The miles between us are filled with the many things you and I
have to do
Why does it always seems you cannot grasp at the things which
you relate to most
and in the suburbs where everyone is smug and in the realm of normality
I am forever captured
I had such dreams and I thought I could make my art work
I thought capitalism was enslavement,
I thought marriage was enslavement,

But the ache of nothingness has become a reality to me and it is
reflected in my eyes
I can only see you
forever
in my eyes
my heart is full of you.....
 
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I hope someone likes this one, its about an insecurity that I hope we all have.



I want to put a camera in your eyes
How would that feel?
I could see myself.
Obviously, I'd reel
It would be horrific;
there's no doubt.
I could look in the mirror
But, I can't look forever
And sometimes
I hold another, so that I can see the back of my head,
And there's another pleasure
But every moment,
Of every day
I could see the back of me if I wanted.
How, exactly, I come across -
If I do.
An insatiable desire
Ever since I knew that
my voice didn't sound the same in my head as it does to you, to them.
I could do the judging - not you.
There would be something to say
when you tell me that I sound stupid,
That when I walk, I do it with an affection.
Well, I could say "no!".
 
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well, I don't think this really counts a "poetry" but I wrote a little something on July 14th when my pangs longing just became too much to take :crazy:

An Ode To Her Ears

My lady's ears, the loveliest of ears, hear me no more
Perfect, I pray they still be, though she will never again reveal them to me
Hidden behind her beautiful blue black hair forevermore
So shall they be for me
Like almost everyone else, I could only gaze upon her, but never really see
Still, my memory of their heavenly form and feel remains
So I search for their signs elsewhere on her angelic face
Like the bottom of the delicate curve to her elegant bangs
There points the ways to the top of her ear's pair of frames
And the bridge of her precious mushroom nose matches their bottoms
Where her succulent ear lobe's have their resting place
My god, & now I just remembered how those most wondrous ears move when she really smiles!!!


Any Similarity to Persons Living Or Dead Is Purely Coincidental
 
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well, I don't think this really counts a "poetry" but I wrote a little something on July 14th when my pangs longing just became too much to take :crazy:

An Ode To Her Ears

My lady's ears, the loveliest of ears, hear me no more
Perfect, I pray they still be, though she will never again reveal them to me
Hidden behind her beautiful blue black hair forevermore
So shall they be for me
Like almost everyone else, I could only gaze upon her, but never really see
Still, my memory of their heavenly form and feel remains
So I search for their signs elsewhere on her angelic face
Like the bottom of the delicate curve to her elegant bangs
There points the ways to the top of her ear's pair of frames
And the bridge of her precious mushroom nose matches their bottoms
Where her succulent ear lobe's have their resting place
My god, & now I just remembered how those most wondrous ears move when she really smiles!!!


Any Similarity to Persons Living Or Dead Is Purely Coincidental

Robby! This is so lovely!!! Really...:)
 
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You're all wonderful poets, and Robby, yours is fantastic- I love the delicacy of it.

Out of interest, has anyone in this thread read Stephen Fry's The Ode Less Travelled? It's more or less a guide to the techniques involved in poetry writing, including many exercises with regards to writing in various forms. I've not got very far with it as I have a thousand other books on the go at the moment, but I bought it with the intention of trying to get some actual technique into my writing and I must say it's quite helpful and very well-written. Recommended.
 
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...A poem about my Dog ( Millie...).

When Millie met an Elephant,
she asked it "What are you" ?
the Elephant said "I'm a little girl".
And Millie replied "Me too"!!
 
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You're all wonderful poets, and Robby, yours is fantastic- I love the delicacy of it.

Out of interest, has anyone in this thread read Stephen Fry's The Ode Less Travelled? It's more or less a guide to the techniques involved in poetry writing, including many exercises with regards to writing in various forms. I've not got very far with it as I have a thousand other books on the go at the moment, but I bought it with the intention of trying to get some actual technique into my writing and I must say it's quite helpful and very well-written. Recommended.

uhh, thanks G-w-t-T :blushing: but I think I could have improved upon it if I had given it more time :o
sometimes though, the words just have to get out of me, in some way :crazy:
as for the Stephen Fry book, it sounds like something I should pick up for sure, when I get the chance :thumb:
 
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Litany

You are the bread and the knife,
The crystal goblet and the wine...

You are the bread and the knife,
the crystal goblet and the wine.
You are the dew on the morning grass
and the burning wheel of the sun.
You are the white apron of the baker,
and the marsh birds suddenly in flight.

However, you are not the wind in the orchard,
the plums on the counter,
or the house of cards.
And you are certainly not the pine-scented air.
There is just no way that you are the pine-scented air.

It is possible that you are the fish under the bridge,
maybe even the pigeon on the general's head,
but you are not even close
to being the field of cornflowers at dusk.

And a quick look in the mirror will show
that you are neither the boots in the corner
nor the boat asleep in its boathouse.

It might interest you to know,
speaking of the plentiful imagery of the world,
that I am the sound of rain on the roof.

I also happen to be the shooting star,
the evening paper blowing down an alley
and the basket of chestnuts on the kitchen table.

I am also the moon in the trees
and the blind woman's tea cup.
But don't worry, I'm not the bread and the knife.
You are still the bread and the knife.
You will always be the bread and the knife,
not to mention the crystal goblet and--somehow--the wine.
 
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Litany

You are the bread and the knife,
The crystal goblet and the wine...

You are the bread and the knife,
the crystal goblet and the wine.
You are the dew on the morning grass
and the burning wheel of the sun.
You are the white apron of the baker,
and the marsh birds suddenly in flight.

However, you are not the wind in the orchard,
the plums on the counter,
or the house of cards.
And you are certainly not the pine-scented air.
There is just no way that you are the pine-scented air.

It is possible that you are the fish under the bridge,
maybe even the pigeon on the general's head,
but you are not even close
to being the field of cornflowers at dusk.

And a quick look in the mirror will show
that you are neither the boots in the corner
nor the boat asleep in its boathouse.

It might interest you to know,
speaking of the plentiful imagery of the world,
that I am the sound of rain on the roof.

I also happen to be the shooting star,
the evening paper blowing down an alley
and the basket of chestnuts on the kitchen table.

I am also the moon in the trees
and the blind woman's tea cup.
But don't worry, I'm not the bread and the knife.
You are still the bread and the knife.
You will always be the bread and the knife,
not to mention the crystal goblet and--somehow--the wine.


Okay, the internet can shut down now. The best has been seen.
 
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Here's the first four stanzas of a poem I'm currently working on (no title as of yet as the arc of it is still developing in my mind). Please excuse the erratic punctuation- I tend to have problems with knowing how to punctuate when writing in verse.

Roll from the bed the mangled slab
Of flesh, thread, ink and hair,
And open the fists of marbled hands
That clamp and crease the air-
For the dreadful steely guile of Man
Long ago passed by there.

Nose pressed to the plaster, then the floor
It hears a throb below
The eyes are closed and the face is drawn
And the lips no ardour know
But the creature soon will sleep no more,
For the morning now draws close.

The sound is that of the earth’s raw hum
And the seep of fetid streams;
Of the beat and thrum of the blazing sun
And the echo of a dream;
And the zealous rush of restless blood,
And the dark root of a scream.*

Looking up, it sees three shapes
Towering above its head.
They do not wear thick ominous capes
Or gloves of fevered red-
Just one to spin, and one to weave,
And one to cut the thread.


*I'm afraid I did plague-arise and take on loan a bit here. "The dark root of a scream" is in fact not mine, but Lorca's- it's the last line of the English translation of his fabulous play Blood Wedding:

"And it barely fits the hand
but it slides in clean
through the astonished flesh
and stops there, at the place
where trembles enmeshed
the dark root of a scream."
(if you're not familiar with Lorca, a great deal of his plays contain verse sections)

Such an intensely powerful phrase. Despite the slight guilt of appropriation, it just seems to fit right now.

I'd appreciate comments etc as it's still a work in progress at the moment. :) I'm most pleased with the third stanza, but the others need a little tweaking I feel, although I can't quite put my finger on it. In all fairness, it is one of my first attempts at a properly structured rhyming poem.
 
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Litany

You are the bread and the knife,
The crystal goblet and the wine...

You are the bread and the knife,
the crystal goblet and the wine.
You are the dew on the morning grass
and the burning wheel of the sun.
You are the white apron of the baker,
and the marsh birds suddenly in flight.

However, you are not the wind in the orchard,
the plums on the counter,
or the house of cards.
And you are certainly not the pine-scented air.
There is just no way that you are the pine-scented air.

It is possible that you are the fish under the bridge,
maybe even the pigeon on the general's head,
but you are not even close
to being the field of cornflowers at dusk.

And a quick look in the mirror will show
that you are neither the boots in the corner
nor the boat asleep in its boathouse.

It might interest you to know,
speaking of the plentiful imagery of the world,
that I am the sound of rain on the roof.

I also happen to be the shooting star,
the evening paper blowing down an alley
and the basket of chestnuts on the kitchen table.

I am also the moon in the trees
and the blind woman's tea cup.
But don't worry, I'm not the bread and the knife.
You are still the bread and the knife.
You will always be the bread and the knife,
not to mention the crystal goblet and--somehow--the wine.

Did you write this? This is fabulous.
 
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Here's the first four stanzas of a poem I'm currently working on (no title as of yet as the arc of it is still developing in my mind). Please excuse the erratic punctuation- I tend to have problems with knowing how to punctuate when writing in verse.

Roll from the bed the mangled slab
Of flesh, thread, ink and hair,
And open the fists of marbled hands
That clamp and crease the air-
For the dreadful steely guile of Man
Long ago passed by there.

Nose pressed to the plaster, then the floor
It hears a throb below
The eyes are closed and the face is drawn
And the lips no ardour know
But the creature soon will sleep no more,
For the morning now draws close.

The sound is that of the earth’s raw hum
And the seep of fetid streams;
Of the beat and thrum of the blazing sun
And the echo of a dream;
And the zealous rush of restless blood,
And the dark root of a scream.*

Looking up, it sees three shapes
Towering above its head.
They do not wear thick ominous capes
Or gloves of fevered red-
Just one to spin, and one to weave,
And one to cut the thread.


*I'm afraid I did plague-arise and take on loan a bit here. "The dark root of a scream" is in fact not mine, but Lorca's- it's the last line of the English translation of his fabulous play Blood Wedding:

"And it barely fits the hand
but it slides in clean
through the astonished flesh
and stops there, at the place
where trembles enmeshed
the dark root of a scream."
(if you're not familiar with Lorca, a great deal of his plays contain verse sections)

Such an intensely powerful phrase. Despite the slight guilt of appropriation, it just seems to fit right now.

I'd appreciate comments etc as it's still a work in progress at the moment. :) I'm most pleased with the third stanza, but the others need a little tweaking I feel, although I can't quite put my finger on it. In all fairness, it is one of my first attempts at a properly structured rhyming poem.

This also is fabulous. Reminds me of Emily Dickinson.
 
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Okay, I need to create now. I'm going to do some stream of consciousness. Performance art. type thing. (literally)

*cracks fingers*

I wandered lonely as a twerp
that wanders on the internet,
oh me, oh my, I didn't know,
which way to go.

I met a person once, it's true,
all real and breathing, shiniest,
but when they turned and looked at me,
I ran away.

it seems to me that in this life
there may be persons, real and bold
but where they live and what they do
I do not know.

And so, you see, my con-clu-sion,
that creeps from out my fevered brain,
is that the world is flat again
and we're all gone.
 
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This also is fabulous. Reminds me of Emily Dickinson.

Thanks. I'm not really familiar with Emily Dickinson's poetry actually, but I have a feeling I should be. :)

Okay, I need to create now. I'm going to do some stream of consciousness. Performance art. type thing. (literally)

*cracks fingers*

I wandered lonely as a twerp
that wanders on the internet,
oh me, oh my, I didn't know,
which way to go.

I met a person once, it's true,
all real and breathing, shiniest,
but when they turned and looked at me,
I ran away.

it seems to me that in this life
there may be persons, real and bold
but where they live and what they do
I do not know.

And so, you see, my con-clu-sion,
that creeps from out my fevered brain,
is that the world is flat again
and we're all gone.

:p I like this, very witty.
 
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