Help please!

slum mum 1974

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I need a really good poem for a lovely young couple about to tie the knot tomorrow. Any ideas? I made them a gift and i want to write an uplifting poem in their wedding card, sad i know, but i can't think of any. I love poets like Dh Lawrence, Larkin, Hardy and most of these are unsuitable there is one i like called "Fidelity" but i think it's a tad too long. Unless i shorten it down. Is that a terrible thing to do?
 
From This:

Fidelity and love are two different things, like a flower
and a gem.
And love, like a flower, will fade, will change into some-
thing else
or it would not be flowery.

O flowers they fade because they are moving swiftly; a
little torrent of life
leaps up to the summit of the stem, gleams, turns over
round the bend
of the parabola of curved flight,
sinks, and is gone, like a comet curving into the invisible.

O flowers they are all the time travelling
like comets, and they come into our ken
for a day, for two days, and withdraw, slowly vanish again.

And we, we must take them on the wind, and let them go.
Embalmed flowers are not flowers, immortelles are not
flowers;
flowers are just a motion, a swift motion, a coloured
gesture;
that is their loveliness. And that is love.

But a gem is different. It lasts so much longer than we do
so much much much longer
that it seems to last forever.
Yet we know it is flowing away
as flowers are, and we are, only slower.
The wonderful slow flowing of the sapphire!

All flows, and every flow is related to every other flow.
Flowers and sapphires and us, diversely streaming.
In the old days, when sapphires were breathed upon and
brought forth
during the wild orgasms of chaos
time was much slower, when the rocks came forth.
It took aeons to make a sapphire, aeons for it to pass away.

And a flower it takes a summer.

And man and woman are like the earth, that brings forth
flowers
in summer, and love, but underneath is rock.
Older than flowers, older than ferns, older than fora-
miniferae
older than plasm altogether is the soul of a man under-
neath.

And when, throughout all the wild orgasms of love
slowly a gem forms, in the ancient, once-more molten
rocks
of two human hearts, two ancient rocks, a man’s heart
and a woman’s,
that is the crystal of peace, the slow hard jewel of trust,
the sapphire of fidelity.
The gem of mutual peace emerging from the wild chaos of love.

To this:

Man and woman are like the earth, that brings forth flowers
in summer, and love, but underneath is rock.
Older than flowers, older than ferns, older than foraminiferae,
older than plasm altogether is the soul underneath.
And when, throughout all the wild chaos of love
slowly a gem forms, in the ancient, once-more-molten rocks
of two human hearts, two ancient rocks,
a man's heart and a woman's,
that is the crystal of peace, the slow hard jewel of trust,
the sapphire of fidelity.
The gem of mutual peace emerging from the wild chaos of love.
 
there was a young man from Bury
who get wed in too much of a hurry
his lines he did fluff
she ran off in a huff
so they all went home for a curry!

how about that then?

If you give me more info I could do something a bit more personal to your happy couple?

love

Grim
 
there was a young man from Bury
who get wed in too much of a hurry
his lines he did fluff
she ran off in a huff
so they all went home for a curry!

how about that then?

If you give me more info I could do something a bit more personal to your happy couple?

love

Grim

Sam and Mike
Getting married in Saddleworth......

Lets see what you can do with that:D
 
This is a bit much.....God's Curse (pt.1)

marriage is a prison
from which theres no escape
there is no door
windows are covered by drapes

marriage is a hell
living with a devil for all eternity
nothing but darkness
cannot find quiet serenity

marriage steals your life
takes away your soul
kills your spirit
buries you in a deep dark hole

marriage is Gods curse
its worse than living
compared to this thing called marriage
death is more forgiving :eek:
 
ok a tad rushed but follow the theme...

there was a young man called Mike
who wanted to get married on a bike
Sam said is it for 2, smurf? *
how much is that saddle worth?
it's customised, there's room for a pike! **

* (that's what his nickname is btw)
** the fish on a bicycle thing

love

Grim
 
ok a tad rushed but follow the theme...

there was a young man called Mike
who wanted to get married on a bike
Sam said is it for 2, smurf? *
how much is that saddle worth?
it's customised, there's room for a pike! **

* (that's what his nickname is btw)
** the fish on a bicycle thing

love

Grim

....er....i dunno, leave it with me....

Don't get married
It will only fall apart
'cos he's a junkie
And she's a tart

This is the one....
 
Don't get married
It will only fall apart
'cos he's a junkie
And she's a tart

that brought Jilted John floating back from the ether of my tiny mind

sings
Oh, she's a slag, and he is a creep
She is a tart, he's very cheap
She is a slut, he thinks he's tough
She is a bitch, he is a puff

love

Grim
 
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