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    - "Haiku grew from an early writing game in which the first three lines of a poem were written by one person. A second person wrote the closing two lines. The great Japanese writer, Basho (1644-94) grew tired of this game. He felt that the first three lines could stand alone. In that way, haiku was born.

    There are no rhyming words in haiku, and each 3-line verse has only 17 syllables or less! The three lines are often arranged so that the first line has five (5) syllables, the second line has seven (7) syllables, and the third line has five (5) syllables. This is called the 5-7-5 rule. Haiku does not always follow the 5-7-5 rule. But to be haiku, the verse must express a thought, feeling or mood. The verse cannot be composed of more than 17 syllables; it cannot have more than 3 lines; and it cannot rhyme.

    As you read each verse below, put yourself in the poet's place - try to share what he or she is feeling. Then share the poem with someone else. You may find that others receive a different image or feel a different mood than you do, all while reading the same words. That is one reason a haiku verse is often accompanied by an illustration.

    Here is an example of haiku written by the great Japanese writer Basho. Ask yourself, what season is it?

    This snowy morning
    That black crow I hate so much ....
    But he's beautiful!
    —Basho " -

    From: http://k12east.mrdonn.org/Haiku.html

    Here's one of mine -

    The arboretum
    In winter hibernation:
    Only the tags flowerlike.

    Anyone else?

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    For a real short guy
    Long ago now, she left me
    But I still want her


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    Quote Originally Posted by Oh my god, it's Robby! View Post
    For a real short guy
    Long ago now, she left me
    But I still want her

    Whether short or tall,
    Winter, spring, summer or fall,
    Hope springs eternal.

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    I'm afraid English isn't suitable for haiku because English isn't monosyllabic language.

    Robby's attempt isn't haiku, but a form of senryu which has less rules than haiku.

    Haiku must have a seasonal word, but senryu doesn't have to have one.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kewpie View Post
    I'm afraid English isn't suitable for haiku because English isn't monosyllabic language.
    Why do you say that?
    Can you prove the claim you make?
    I think it's not true.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Kewpie View Post
    I'm afraid English isn't suitable for haiku because English isn't monosyllabic language.

    Robby's attempt isn't haiku, but a form of senryu which has less rules than haiku.

    Haiku must have a seasonal word, but senryu doesn't have to have one.
    Quote Originally Posted by I am a Ghost View Post
    Why do you say that?
    Can you prove the claim you make?
    I think it's not true.

    Perhaps it was true in the past but now the form has been embraced by the world - http://www.haiku-hia.com/index_en.html

    It has even mutated into a science fiction favourite - http://www.scifaiku.com/

    So, it appears, anything goes

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kewpie View Post
    I'm afraid English isn't suitable for haiku because English isn't monosyllabic language.

    Robby's attempt isn't haiku, but a form of senryu which has less rules than haiku.

    Haiku must have a seasonal word, but senryu doesn't have to have one.
    I was gonna say that too, but I just thought I'd let it pass


    ps: Japanese is likely better than English in many ways, I vow someday to learn it

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    Along heaven's gate
    Hoping to get in but I
    Doubt that I'll make it.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Happy Maudlin View Post
    Along heaven's gate
    Hoping to get in but I
    Doubt that I'll make it.
    Both heaven and hell
    Are here on earth: we can use
    Imagination.

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    Quote Originally Posted by goinghome View Post
    Both heaven and hell
    Are here on earth: we can use
    Imagination.
    Imagination
    Dominates my reality
    I live in my dreams

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    You dominate me
    I love you so much for that
    That is all there is

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    Quote Originally Posted by Oh my god, it's Robby! View Post
    You dominate me
    I love you so much for that
    That is all there is
    It was a good lay,
    But you being you, and I being
    Me; that's fair enough.

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    divine wind comes now
    oh take me, take me, take me
    unless God says no

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    Quote Originally Posted by Oh my god, it's Robby! View Post
    divine wind comes for me
    oh take me, take me, take me
    unless God says no
    You are my last fling.
    No: I've changed my mind again!
    GOODNIGHT, AND THANK YOU!

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    A song floats constant
    in my mind softly thumping
    words: pump up the jam

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    A weeping willow
    Summer flame that never fades
    Love of two is one

    where did that come from?

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    To convey ones feelings in seventeen syllables
    Is very diffic

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    The sun warms me up
    Here I lay basking again
    Grass caressing me

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    Quote Originally Posted by I am a Ghost View Post
    Why do you say that?
    Can you prove the claim you make?
    I think it's not true.

    I missed your clever offering in the debate earlier, I am a Ghost: maith thú!

    Quote Originally Posted by helen661 View Post
    A weeping willow
    Summer flame that never fades
    Love of two is one

    where did that come from?
    Quote Originally Posted by Black_Eyed_Sioux View Post
    The sun warms me up
    Here I lay basking again
    Grass caressing me
    These two are wonderful, very evocative of a seasonal warmth sorely lacking on this side of the world at the moment. Thanks for getting us back on track.


    Wrens in the fuchsia:
    Their indeterminate jerks,
    Jazzing up the hedge.

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    Sestina: write one.

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